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28/11/2017 2:04 pm
zazen: I have
"Ordinary Mind" - my shadow
ordinary head
her latest letter -
samadhi of cake crumbs
cleft between teeth
green the leaves
a light breeze ripples
my heart
rustling in the cosmos
it's little Jenny Wren
tugging at leaves
Topic starter
28/11/2017 2:06 pm
This is a test posting to see if you are receiving email notifications of new topics. Please confirm that you do (and feel free to comment on the haiku). George
28/11/2017 4:04 pm
I do. I really like the first and third haiku here George, and don't think you should change a thing. I'm not sure about 'cleft' in the second one - is it a noun or a verb here? If it was removed, I think it might work just as well? Incidentally, if you have a couple of your own favourite haiku that you wouldn't mind me showing at my reading circle, I'd love to use them? I really liked the one you read out about the family barbeque - how did it go?
