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02/05/2017 12:28 pm
Daylight robbery -
the herring gull hops off
with my battered fish.
Sundown...
at the heart of the bush
the last red berry
Warmth of the snug...
the old regulars nursing pints
of bitter and mild.
In a party hat,
a morose middle manager
dreams of murder.
Heartbreak forgotten -
the sudden redness
of rowan berries.
At Todaiji
the sacred deer
steal my nuts.
Stuart.
02/05/2017 4:45 pm
Very funny, Stuart! The old regulars, bitter and mild, are amusing characters, but so is the sad clown who always gets his lunch nicked by the wildlife. The last red berry is wonderful but also amusing in its hard lack of grandeur.
07/05/2017 5:29 am
These are lovely. I particularly liked both haiku with berries in them, really beautiful. One tiny suggestion but I'm not sure of it myself, would be to drop the 'of' in 'of bitter and mild'?
h x
01/07/2017 8:46 am
Stunning, particularly the last red berry in the bush.
