What a beautiful haibun, the whole thing is prose poetry. And what a great writing prompt. This is really revealing of you, past and present. A lovely...
Nice Karen. I particularly love the last three - really lovely, and they all seem to have in common a curious sort of personification of the objects s...
I do. I really like the first and third haiku here George, and don't think you should change a thing. I'm not sure about 'cleft' in the second one - i...
Great haiku, and the reference to 'the' Durex is effective. The scene itself is effective too but I couldn't help feeling that the narrator came acros...
I liked this when you read it out, and it's still good on the page. As well as the imagery and atmosphere, I like the increasingly short sentences, le...
I love this, and it makes me look forward to the next sangha! The haiku leaves me with a sense of wholesomeness?
Great mood, perfect end-of-summer atmosphere. Small suggestion for final paragraph where the tense seems to change - could you join these sentences? "...
That's really lovely.
Wonderful, suspended always in the gap of 'suchness'. Lovely.
Lovely description of the storm and of being warm in bed while it rages on outside. Love the hunkered city, the Zen reflections, and the way the piece...
These are lovely. I particularly liked both haiku with berries in them, really beautiful. One tiny suggestion but I'm not sure of it myself, would be ...
Stuart is back! Lovely Stuart, beautifully written, sparse, and the final haiku is great, with the way summer seems endless in childhood as does yout...
... actually, I'd also say that they're about a moment when the self dissolves! It occurs to me that this is what all haiku are, perhaps?
These are wonderful George, I really feel they capture a moment of permeability between the viewer and what's viewed, if that makes sense. The only on...
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